Sidey’s Weekend Theme is “sunset”.
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Where just half-an-hour earlier it had been a huge ball, the sun was now just a tiny sliver of yellow, and as he watched it slipped beneath the horizon, leaving nothing but a darkening sky lined with yellow-white streaks.
It was sunset.
Flurry sighed and shrugged his temporarily massive shoulders. “Nearly over now,” he thought. “Just a couple of hours to midnight.”
He and five other horses were yoked up to a huge silver coach, parked outside a palace where a great ball was taking place. Yet just four hours ago he had been a tiny mouse, frantically scurrying in fear from the sadistic house-cat Sebastian, while a young girl sat weeping, as she usually did, on a stool in the corner of the kitchen. Then a Fairy Godmother (Flurry Mouse had never seen one before, but everyone instinctively knows what a Fairy Godmother looks like) appeared in a puff of smoke (everyone knows that too) and announced that Cinderella, for such was the girl’s name, would indeed go to the ball.
She turned a pumpkin into a coach, made Cinderella’s dress more substantial yet somehow more revealing and, having found six mice and two toads in a kitchen that Cinderella supposedly spent all day sweeping clean, magicked them into two coachmen and six white horses.
Oh, the sensation! Oh, the joyous feeling of awesome power and strength as his legs grew longer, his flanks grew lankier and his haunches grew raunchier. Cinderella stepped into the coach in her glass slippers (proof, if proof were needed, that there is no shoe so daft and uncomfortable that some woman will not wear it) and Flurry (or Thunderbolt, as he suddenly felt the urge to call himself) led the rest of the team forward.
Covering Sebastian in a pile of steaming poo as he went by was possibly the most satisfying thing he had ever done in his life.
Urged on by the coachmen (for the ball was now well in progress, Cinderella’s sisters had left to go to it hours ago) they proceeded at a gallop towards the palace. Intoxicated by sheer speed Flurry attempted to jump a fence, trailing behind him five horses to whom he had omitted to mention this plan and a large coach. He cleared the fence by a foot but gravity had varying degrees of effect upon the rest of the party, and as a whole the manoeuvre could not be called a success. Still, they were all in one piece, which was more than could be said for the fence.
They skidded to a halt in a spray of gravel outside the palace, Cinderella clinked her way up the steps sounding like a milk-float, and they settled down to wait.
The sun set, as we have seen, time passed and midnight grew nearer and nearer. Flurry had been given drink from a bucket and a nose-bag disappointingly full of hay. If horses eat dried grass, he thought, no wonder they crap like that. When he had finished eating he had instinctively tried to clean his whiskers with his paw and instead had smacked himself in the face with his hoof.
Now he was starting to worry. There were nine minutes to go to midnight, he had heard the Fairy Godmother say that the spell would end at midnight, and there was still no sign of Cinderella. And their house was eight minutes drive away.
Then suddenly there she was, racing lop-sidedly towards them, one glass slipper bouncing noisily down the steps beside her like a Scottie-dog yapping along beside its owner. Behind her ran what was obviously the Prince yelling “come back!” in a plaintive voice. God, what a wimp, thought Flurry, she’s running in a long dress and one shoe, she’s so full of champagne that you can hear her fart from here as she runs, yet he still can’t catch her, his family must be really inbred to produce a specimen like him.
Cinderella leapt into the coach. “Go, go, go,” yelled one of the coachmen, but Flurry had already flared his nostrils, reared his front legs and was off.
About half way home the yelling coachman produced a whip and slapped Flurry on the flank with it. Flurry calmly dug his heels into the mud, watched the coachman fly over his head into a hedge, then carried on, faster than before.
They so nearly made it. They were right outside their house when a nearby clock tower bell struck. Flurry watched the world grow larger as he grew smaller, while from behind him came the most horrendous squelching sound he had ever heard.
No other version of this tale that you might have read describes what it was like for Cinderella as she suddenly found herself sitting inside a rapidly shrinking pumpkin. She trudged into the house with her hair lank with pumpkin juice, her face covered in pumpkin seeds and her old familiar dress looking as if she had barfed Sunny Delight all over it.
Flurry followed her indoors, trotted around a corner, and found himself face-to-face with Sebastian.
Sebastian was not in a good mood. As a cat he had only one means of cleaning himself, and an evening spent licking horseshit off his fur had left a sour taste in his mouth, in more ways than one. Now he was looking at something smaller than himself, something on whom he could take out all his boiling rage. A slow smile came over his face.
Flurry stood to his full height on his back legs and whinnied.
It came out as a squeak, of course, but Sebastian looked into his eyes as he did it and a feeling of unexpected fear penetrated deep into his soul. He turned and fled.
Flurry grinned to himself as he trotted along. He one-handedly ripped a huge piece of cheese from a mousetrap as he passed it, and heard it snap loudly behind him as he headed back to his mouse hole for a late-night snack and then a long, long sleep, during which he dreamt of his tail swishing behind him, the wind blowing through his mane, and the splash of his hooves as he galloped through beach-side surf.
Well, that trip to the ball was a life changer!! Great post, Tinman.
Wow, I was over at your place while you were here at mine, and at least you spelt all the words right in your comment, unlike me.
I bet my grandchuldren would love that version. You have a talent for empathising with the strangest creatures.
Thanks Viv. The odd thing is that I can’t stand mice normally.
Someone once published a book of modern fairy tales, updating them for the 20th Century. I think it’s about time for a new version. There must be a publisher out there with a sense of humour.
My favourite part in a raft of favourites was the horse trying to jump the fence.
Thanks Tilly.
How come you’re now posting as The Hub?
(I just thought of a possible answer there and chickened out of saying it. The last word was going to be “envy”).
Your mind works like a man’s, Tinman. 🙂
Hub left a comment on my blog and WordPress forgot to change back. I’d left about fifteen comments before I noticed.
I enjoyed the new take on an old tale.
Thanks, GM.
What time do all you people get up at? I got up at 7.30 for the first Sunday in about 45 years, and now I find that everybody else is awake too.
Do you all do this every weekend?
This. Is. Awesome!
Except that I am absolutely sure that Cinderella never farted as she ran down the stairs sans one glass slipper.
How sure? Champagne is very fizzy, you know.
That bit was my daughter’s favorite part.
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Oh what fun. Thanks for the pleasure
Thank you, as always, for the theme, glad you enjoyed what I did with it.
Great read. I enjoyed, it sure is more fun than the version I grew up with 😀
I’m glad you liked it, and welcome to my blog, Gobetween.
‘yet he still can’t catch her, his family must be really inbred to produce a specimen like him.’
Gold.
Thank you, young lady.
Awesome take on the fairy tale – altogether an enjoyable read. And how satisfying that Flurry gets to retain a bit of the borrowed equine spirit… Love your sense of humour, btw.
Welcome along, gospelwriter, and thank you for your kind comment.
I’m so happy to know the story from the mouse’s perspective. I just read Cinderella to my daughter last night (being 12 doesn’t keep her from wanting a bedtime story). I may read her this one tonight.
I’d be honoured, Patti. You might have to change one or two of the words, though.
I did indeed do a bit of on-the-spot editing as I read.